Death Rider The Alicorn's Revenge

This Is The First Chapter Of My Story About Death Knight Rider The Alicorn I Hope You Like It.


The Last Thing Death Rider Remembered Before Waking Up In The Hot Firey Pits Of H*ll Was That He Got Hit So Hard In The Face By A Cannon That His Horn That Was Actually Shaped Like A Sword.... It Cracked And Broke Off. Now The Horn On His Head Is Short And Spikey And There Was Blood On It Because He Had To Start Defending Himself From Demons As Soon As He Woke Up In This Wretched Place... He Almost Gave Up And Laid Down To Cry But He Remembered His Girlfriend Rainbow Dash And Also He Has Never Cried!!! Not Even When He Was Just 7 Years Old And Watched His Mom Baked Goods The Unicorn And Dad Football Coach The Pegasus Get Taken Away To The Glue Factory. He Takes Out The Locket He Has Around His Neck That Looks Like A Cool Spiked Collar But Has A Silver Heart Attached To It And Opens It To Reveal A Picture Of Him And Rainbow Dash Kissing.



He Smiles To Himself And Chuckles. He Puts The Locket Away And Continues Fighting Through Demons And Succubuses Until He Reaches The Portal That Takes Him To The Level Above This One. The Portal Kinda Looks Like Neither Portals In Minecraft Except The Swirly Light Is Cool And Red And Electric. Even Though It Looked Electric He Jumped Right Into It Anyways Because He Is Brave And Nothing Could Hurt Worse Than A Cannon To The Face.

The Layer Of Hell He Was In Now Was Full Of Ice And Demons Made Of Ice. Death Rider Chuckles To Himself Once More Before Activating His Fire Power And Has It Launched Through His Broken Horn. He Melts The Entire Layer Until It Is Like A Big Lake And Then He Makes His Way To The Next Portal. When He Stepped Through, He Could Not Believe His Eyes At Who He Was Looking At In H*ll...

[TO BE CONTINUED IN THE NEXT CHAPTER]

Yeah So I Basically Have The Whole Thing Written Out... I Just Want To See If Any Of You Are Cool Enough To Like This Kinda Stuff... It Gets Kinda Dark Later On... And Kinda Scary If.. Well If Your A P*ssay LOL JK!

Let Me Know What You Think Though And Share It With Your Friends And Make Them Jealousy That You Have A Secret Preview Copy From Before The Book Is In Stores And Im Basically A Millionaire

how is he fighting demons if he died? do you get to keep your body in hell? or is he like the guy in doom?
also please do not talk about succubi on this forum thank you! that is a violation of rule 2. thank you!

xXdarkprncessfluttershyXx wrote:H*ll is on fire though, not frozen...

My Brother Let Me Read His Book From School Called Dantes Inferno Where A Guy Goes To H*ll Actually And There Was A Level Where It Was Really Cold Heh. But I Guess Not Everyone Reads Dark And Twisted Books About H*ll And Demons And Stuff Like That Like I Do...

DeathRiderShadow wrote:Guy Goes To Hell Actually And

rule 1 please! further rule 1 violations will get you a warning. thank you!

xTwilyXx wrote:

DeathRiderShadow wrote:Guy Goes To Hell Actually And

rule 1 please! further rule 1 violations will get you a warning. thank you!

Heh I Forgot Because My Mom Legs Me Say H*ll And F*ck And Sh*t Whenever I Want Basically... Sorry

DeathRiderShadow wrote:

xTwilyXx wrote:

DeathRiderShadow wrote:Guy Goes To Hell Actually And

rule 1 please! further rule 1 violations will get you a warning. thank you!

Heh I Forgot Because My Mom Legs Me Say H*ll And F*ck And Sh*t Whenever I Want Basically... Sorry

oh wow. even cr*p and c*nt?

this story is f*ckin awesome dude... I dont think its scary at all but your dark death poney is really cool

Um…..This Death Rider guy seems kind of like a Gary Stu to me…

xTwilyXx wrote:

DeathRiderShadow wrote:

xTwilyXx wrote:

DeathRiderShadow wrote:Guy Goes To Hell Actually And

rule 1 please! further rule 1 violations will get you a warning. thank you!

Heh I Forgot Because My Mom Legs Me Say H*ll And F*ck And Sh*t Whenever I Want Basically... Sorry

oh wow. even cr*p and c*nt?

What Is C*nt

Sense You All Like My Story So Much I Had A Idea...

What If I Let You Decide Who He Meets In Hell Next... I Had Stuff Planned But You Guys Are Cool So I'll Let You Contribute

Who Should Death Shadow Meet Next Chapter. Leave Your Comments Below

YOUNGMAN YOU SHOULD NOT. BE WRITING SUCH A STORY ABOUT THINGS LIKE THIS.

JANET58430 wrote:YOUNGMAN YOU SHOULD NOT. BE WRITING SUCH A STORY ABOUT THINGS LIKE THIS.

Are You A Cop

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